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Is this the real world we see?
Or is it just an illusion of reality?
Will death be the thing to set us free?
Or is that just a weird mentality?

Is life just an illusion?
Do we perhaps preserve things differently?
And is this all just a big delusion?

We want the people to think free
But can they be free if they need to follow the rules?
Can they break free,
Without being branded as fools?

If we want to know more
And learn the real truth
We have to venture in the unknown more

A wise man doesn't take the road everybody sees
A wise man travels off the road and leaves a track
I needed to get my mind of things
I visited my grandmother today, she's dying.
Doctor said that she might not make it to tomorrow...

Anyways I'm here to get my mind of that and that's basically why I wrote this.

Life is just an illusion I think.
Maybe the life we live is a dream, and what we think is a dream is the reality.
We can't be sure before we try to discover it.
Those we dare to might be branded a fool or outcast, but they may discover something of the utmost importance.

Please leave feedback so I can improve in the comments.

Written by Jerrel Simons
Jerrel Simons AKA Koratoshisfriend

EDIT: My grandmother passed away in the night of the 25th of July on the 26th of July peacefully in her sleep
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deeclear Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I like this poem and I need to learn from it. I turned 30 in june and ever since then I have been doing more thing for the 1st time and until I die I want to experience more and more new things.
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well it's a good thing that you're trying out new things
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deeclear Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
very true. I like trying new things. It is so much fun.
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
happy new year and let's make it a good one to try things in
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MysticHorns Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Professional Writer
Wonderful written...much love for you!
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you for reading
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ShuyinTheEnigmatic Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2012  Student Writer
The rhymes are very nicely done, and the poem as a whole is very well-written. The message is clear for all to read, definitely.
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for the feedback ^^
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ShuyinTheEnigmatic Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome!
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
^^
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ShuyinTheEnigmatic Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012  Student Writer
Indeed.
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WordOfChen Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012  Professional Writer
My condolences for your loss, and let me just say that this was a wonderful piece. I wish ye all the best lad

-Captain Chenbeard of the Black Fedora Pirates :iconwordofchen:
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
it's okay, I am thankfull that she passed away without too much pain

Thank you, can you give any feedback?
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143PEACE Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Student Writer
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I like how in places it rhymes, whether that unintentional or intentional I like it. I also like all the questions in this because it makes you think and contemplate and wonder. A poem should make you think or remember something or be relate-able to. Art is a form expression and therefore should speak to those reading or looking and I think this poem does a very good job of that.
I also like the way you ended the poem. It was very deep statement and because the stanza was also 2 lines instead of 3 or 4 like the others it was different and made it more memorable, if that makes sense. Like after I left the page i could still remember the last two lines and I was still thinking about the poem because that was the affect it had on me. It made me think and wonder. A good poem should should have some sort of affect on the reader.
All in all you did a beautiful job and I love it. Keep up the amazing writing
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delusionaltherapist Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Student General Artist
Agreed
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for the feedback my friend ^^
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143PEACE Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Student Writer
No problem ^^ anytime
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
^^
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TheMADGrimReaper Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry Jerrel. My grandmama passed away on the same day of yours,I know how you feel. I'm here if you need someone to talk to :)
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh I'm sorry to hear that, if you wanna talk just say so
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TheMADGrimReaper Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
'kay. Thanks ~
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
^^
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mailn6 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Student General Artist
Your absolute best work - the first verse is my favorite, and the whole thing comes together so beautifully. It's a little Inception-esque, almost. But it's more than that.

It helps us realize how puny and unimportant we really are, how horrible our sense of perspective is - we've proven, as a people, that most of us can't even manage to respect ourselves, let alone each other and our Earth. We think we've made breakthroughs - in the end, however, we see that what we do isn't really much at all. But unlike ~MidnightSt0rm's opinion, I believe that we do have a purpose, not matter how small. Because if we were all alone in this one universe (one of many, perhaps), cast onto our planet for no real reason - wouldn't it be a huge waste of space and time?
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you, a beautiful opinion
We all have a purpose but I don't know my purpose
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mailn6 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Student General Artist
*the devil's advocate rushes in and yells*

"BUT WHY SHOULD THERE BE A PURPOSE?!"
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
WHY ARE YOU NOT WORKING?!
DIDN'T I GIVE YOU AN ASSIGNMENT?!

*he runs off*

God, Hell sucks, there are only bloodsucking lawyers here xD
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mailn6 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Student General Artist
:iconevillaugh1plz:
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
xD
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mailn6 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Student General Artist
:D
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
^^
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VanguardHammy Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist
D: Awww. I never knew my grandparents, only my mothers mom died when I was 8, but Im 15 now I can't remember her voice she was very nice, bought me and my bro Happy meal every day and said that she loves us... why is world so cruel?!
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I don't know my friend, I don't know...
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Lacriyme Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Very beautiful. I like how you portray a perspective on life throughout this. And I definitely agree, the first verse sounds like a song.
I'm so very sorry about your grandmother <3
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you, got any feedback

it's okay, she passed on peacefully in her sleep
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143PEACE Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Student Writer
beautiful poem. i love it and the idea behind it that life is just an illusion. I think that life is an illusion. I think it is the most complex yet beautiful lie out there.
and I'm sorry about your grandmother. I really hope she turns out to be okay. No matter which way it swings though, i'm here if you want to talk about it or rant or just need someone to talk to to get your mind off things. I'm here for you my friend
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you, got any feedback for me?

and she passed on peacefully in her sleep, it was without pain so I'm content with that
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143PEACE Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Student Writer
that's good. i'm glad she went peacefully

and i posted a separate comment with my feedback
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
ah okay, thank you
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143PEACE Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012  Student Writer
no problem
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
^^
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Gogo-Ipi Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
I am very sorry for your grandmother. I hope she would make it through and get better soon, anyway.

This poem is wonderful
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you for the kind words but she passed on her sleep last night

thanks, any feedback?
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Gogo-Ipi Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
I am so sorry.
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
it's okay
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Riarri Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry about your grandmother. I really am. I just can't say I've felt the same before.

It's a very touching poem, and it's, well, left me speechless. I can't say much else other than it really is beautiful.
It speaks volumes, and that's the true meaning of a poem, right? ^-^
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
it's okay, she passed away in het sleep peacefully

thank you, got any feedback?
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Riarri Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It's quite well written, but for feedback...
You seem to ask a lot of questions. Not that it's a bad thing (I ask questions in my writing too), and it's probably just for the feeling of this poem, but questions are usually used for probing thoughts out of readers. Having a lot of questions could make the reader either feel overwhelmed or start ignoring the questions.

Then again, it doesn't happen to everyone, and as I said, it's a well written piece. It's just something I noticed. (:
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ah I see, did not see it like that before, thank you for the help
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Riarri Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No problem~
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
^^
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