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In the murky waters of the swamp
Where the air is quite damp
Your heart will be stricken with fear
For the beast draws near

His eyes will gaze through your soul
If you stare at him too long he will take a high toll
He will rip the flesh from your bones
And then crush your bones using stones

His hind legs give him incredible speed
Just so you can become his feed
His wings are large
and leave his enemies in fear

Can somebody slay this mighty beast?
Without ending up as his feast?
Nobody will know
But I know I don't want him as a foe
A commission I did for the amazing :iconibeblu: please have a look at her work.

:thumb303021610: Preview image drawn by :iconibeblu:
Please go have a look at the real work: [link]

Poem written by Jerrel Simons
Preview picture :iconibeblu:
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:iconladyofgaerdon:
LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Professional Writer
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singitsister Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012
i realy like it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! and dont hate me but i dont really like... "And then crush your bones using stones" i just dont think it fits
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah I know the sentence put me off too, but some people do like it and it does give that feel of it being a horrific monster so I dunno
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singitsister Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012
true but i still just feel like it doesnt belong, but thats just me! very good though!
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you ^^
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Angelic1994Demon Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
looks like a chimera from Full Metal Alechemist i love it. great drawing ^.^
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
then please check out :iconibeblu:'s page cause she was the one who made the picture, she's an amazing artist to say the least
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sen22 Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
I like it, especially the description in the first verse.
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
glad you like it
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link-zelda22 Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
awesome and well written!
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
glad you like it
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link-zelda22 Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
:nod:
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
^^
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IBeBlu Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012
I love how this turned out, thank you for everything you put into it! It's just what I wanted!!!
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
glad you like it, I must say the monster you drew was absolutely amazing
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RebbleDiamonds Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i love it. out of all the dev stacks that i received from groups, yours definitely was the most enticing. And you did not disappoint me, my friend. Beautifully written. It has this deep, heavy richness to it that plays so well with the topic. And i really enjoy your word choice and style. Wonderful. You should be more popular :)
:love: keep writing.
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad you enjoyed it ^^
And I will keep on writing
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RPbogal Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thts good :3
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
glad you like it
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funnyhose Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Amazing <3
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks ^^
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Forgotten-Reaper Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012
Fantastic :) Your works tend to be.
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Glad you like it, and I try my best, but I'm not so great
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Forgotten-Reaper Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012
Practice makes perfect my friend :thumbsup:
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I can practice as much as I want, perfect it will never be xD
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Flicksykitty Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, wow...

that just sent shivers down my spine. Nice horror poem.
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Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
glad you like it ^^
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