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Blood flows from our wrists,
Making our hands turn into fists.
We only feel the pain and sorrow,
Have we given up hope for a better tomorrow?

The rope is hanging from the ceiling,
Helping us end that miserable feeling.
The pills are scattered across the floor,
Maybe we need to swallow just one more?

Others might refuse to see the cruelty of life,
While others try to end it by the knife.
Trying to get out of this cruel dream,
Sometimes all we can do is scream.

There are others like you out there,
You might not yet know where.
But they try to overcome it,
That's something not all will admit.

Every one of us needs a helping hand,
Facing these torments alone is something none can withstand.
But we would first need to admit and ask,
Be willing to take off this smiling mask.
Before we get to help to finally smile again,
And get rid of all this pain.
Hello everybody
This thing was written for all my friends who were once considering suicide (but luckily were talked out of it) or attempted it and survived.
Trust me, everybody who's thinking about, it is not the solution.
If you want to talk just say so, I reply always, but since I'm leaving for Norway on Saturday I might reply late so keep that in mind.

Please leave feedback so I can improve.

Some people have said that mature content would be better, I don't really think so myself but if a lot of people would ask for it I can change it.

Written by Jerrel Simons
© Koratoshisfriend
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:iconmagalbagal:
magalbagal Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Student Writer
poems written very well. rope. not the first time i've thought bout that
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:iconkoratoshisfriend:
Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thanks for reading
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DragonHeart136 Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012
The structure needs a improvement, but the poem itself is a generic to a friend style. So there wouldn't be a reformed style of structure in the poem itself. Regardless though keep up the good work and improve yourself in the arts of the word.
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:iconkoratoshisfriend:
Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thanks for the feedback and I will continue to try to improve
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:iconmagalbagal:
magalbagal Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Student Writer
some times it feels like it's the only solution... i don't even know who i am anymore. i doubt anyone can help me. i doubt i'll make it by the end of this year. but thanks 4 the support. me and many others will appreciate it.
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:iconkoratoshisfriend:
Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
it's not the only solution trust me on that my friend
if you want I can help
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:iconmagalbagal:
magalbagal Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2012  Student Writer
how?
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:iconkoratoshisfriend:
Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I dunno, maybe just talk with you
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:iconmagalbagal:
magalbagal Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2012  Student Writer
mm.. thanks. ok. i'll give it a try
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:iconkoratoshisfriend:
Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
so what do you want to talk about?
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