Shop Mobile More Submit  Join Login


An unpleasant feeling you may think
The feeling cannot be described in only ink
It can come and go in just a blink
It would be the bitter taste if life would be a drink

It's what gets us down
It's what leaves us with a frown
Sometimes makes us want to leave town
And sometimes makes us want ourselves to drown

It sure isn't much fun
We always want it to be over and done
We can't make it undone

Pain, is a measurement of will power
Recovering from pain may take more than an hour
But in the end you will blossom like a flower
Pain is only a measurement of how strong our will power is.
The more pain a person can take, the stronger a person is.

Like a great man once said ''It's not about how hard you can hit, it's about how hard you can get hit''

Written by Jerrel Simons
:iconkoratoshisfriend:
Image was a free stock image

Please leave feedback in the comments
Add a Comment:
 
:iconjinxkatkazama:
JinxKatKazama Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014  Student Writer
Because in the end, from ashes beautiful things must rise
Reply
:iconmaukieyumiz:
maukieyumiz Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
perfect love the messige
what ever sh** we go through, it makes us better people
Reply
:iconkoratoshisfriend:
Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
yeah it does
Reply
:iconsen22:
sen22 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012  Student General Artist
If there would be no feelings and no pain we would be nothing more than the trees with the brains.
Reply
:iconkoratoshisfriend:
Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
not sure if that would be weird, or awesome
Reply
:iconsen22:
sen22 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012  Student General Artist
I think it would be both. But from the negative, there would be no love and no hatred what keeps the world and the balance.
Reply
:iconkoratoshisfriend:
Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
yeah
Reply
:iconchalekam:
chalekam Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Eloquent poetry that rhymes?! Perfect! Enduring is not easy, and it warms the heart to know that such a burden is not suffered for nothing, or alone. Thank you so much!
Reply
:iconkoratoshisfriend:
Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Eloquent? Sorry, my English skills are not that great. Could you perhaps explain what ''eloquent'' means?
Reply
:iconchalekam:
chalekam Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Eloquent - Well said, vivid and artistic. (this is not a dictionary definition BTW) Compare the dialogue of shows like Spartacus, Rome, 300 - the frank miller movie. they speak in a way which is pleasing to hear.
Reply
:iconkoratoshisfriend:
Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ah I see, thanks
Reply
:iconjarofhope:
JarOfHope Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
really good!!! I LOVED it!!! :D
Reply
:iconkoratoshisfriend:
Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
not my best work but still xD
Reply
:iconvampiresei:
VampireSei Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
Wonderful ^^ Gives me a lot of confidence in myself.
Reply
:iconkoratoshisfriend:
Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
glad you liked it ^^
Reply
:iconlightwolf87:
LightWolf87 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012  Student Writer
Love it.
Reply
:iconkoratoshisfriend:
Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
glad you like it, any feedback?
Reply
:iconlightwolf87:
LightWolf87 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012  Student Writer
Hmm. I do understand that's it very emotional. For some reason when I saw the title I thought there might be some example of pyshical pain or comparing it to emotional pain. That's just what I thought from the title so I might be reading to much into it but I did enjoy the fact you did mention emotional pain of all aspects. Sorry if this doesnt help or is just me rambling.
Reply
:iconkoratoshisfriend:
Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
it's okay, every opinion matters
Reply
:iconchinchillaplum:
Chinchillaplum Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
You're a very good poet! <3
Reply
:iconkoratoshisfriend:
Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
but not nearly as good in writing as you
Reply
:iconchinchillaplum:
Chinchillaplum Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
<3 naww
Reply
:iconkoratoshisfriend:
Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
^^
Reply
:iconc1oud9:
c1oud9 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
nice rhyming
it really describes pain in an easy to understand way
nice work
Reply
:iconkoratoshisfriend:
Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
glad you like it, any further feedback?
Reply
:iconc1oud9:
c1oud9 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
umm nothing i can think of
i really like your word choice
ive been trying to boost up my vocab so i'll be able to do better rhyming an such
if you get a chance could you check out some of my work?
Reply
:iconkoratoshisfriend:
Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
yeah sure, can you link me to one of your pieces?
Reply
:icon143peace:
143PEACE Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012  Student Writer
told you I would come and read it :)
Reply
:iconkoratoshisfriend:
Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
well what do you think?
Reply
:icon143peace:
143PEACE Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012  Student Writer
I like it (:
I'm jealous of your rhyming skills
Reply
:iconkoratoshisfriend:
Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
*looks both ways*
I rhyme myself most of the times, but if I really get stuck or don't know how to pronounce a word I use Rhymezone. It also serves as dictionary so that is really helpfull. Sometimes I get curious and learn complete new words :D
Reply
:icon143peace:
143PEACE Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2012  Student Writer
oh cool! :D
Reply
:iconkoratoshisfriend:
Koratoshisfriend Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
^^
Reply
Add a Comment:
 
×

:iconkoratoshisfriend: More from Koratoshisfriend


Featured in Collections

Written works by Angelis1911

Writing by SecretlyFading

Literature Poetry by icytemptress99


More from DeviantArt



Details

Submitted on
August 6, 2012
File Size
698 bytes
Link
Thumb

Stats

Views
1,708 (1 today)
Favourites
66 (who?)
Comments
33
×