Sta.sh
Staring at a blank paper
Is an artist's worst nightmare.
The artist is the shaper,
Their thoughts somewhere up in the air.
They are searching for inspiration,
Sometimes they are even searching the skies.
It takes a lot of concentration,
But you can always see the passion burning in their eyes.
Being an artist does not always mean you're creative.
It just means that you want to create something,
And never want to give up.
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Your description's are good enough and I like the reference again to the artist, to emphasize that this is not just any person, that this is an artist, and that an artist is a creator.
However there are points I do want to pick up on though, specifically the last line of the first stanza. "Their thoughts somewhere up in the air." I don't quite understand why myself, but this doesn't really seem to fit too well, it strikes me as being a bit disjointed. I think it might just be the word 'up', makes the sentence a bit too wordy.
The rhyme is there, but it is rather subtle, which is good in a way, it means that your focus isn't diverted from the poem to the rhyme scheme.
"But you can always see the passion burning in their eyes." Nope, I would re-work this sentence. It is far too wordy, and seems to almost lag and drag after the rest of the poem. It stops it a little, disrupts the flow.
The last stanza I think could do with some re-work too. It doesn't seem to end the best that it could. It leaves off almost as though there is more to be said, more that could be said.
Love this poem. <3